1- i want to go to the trip
2. As always my family and I go to the Hamedan
این جمله یعنی "با توجه به اینکه من و خانوادم همیشه به همدان میریم" . پس طبیعتا باید بعد از این جمله یه جمله مرتبط با این آورده بشه
پس شما بهتره اینو به my family and I always go to the Hamedan تغییر بدید
3. we are going to leave tehran : اینجا استفاده از the لازم نیست
4. my father has a car and we always go to the trip by that
5. In the Hamedan we will go to my grandmother’s house and pass these days in her house
6.We’re going to go to the Mellat Park on 13th
7. and we are going to return to tehran on april 14th
این متن اصلاح شده :
Next week is Eid. we want to go to a vacation. my family and I always go to Hamedan. We’re going to leave Tehran on Esfand 29th at 6:00AM. My father has a car and we always go to the trip by that.
In Hamedan we will go to my grandmother’s house and pass these days there. We’re going to visit our relatives and go to the historical places like BabaTaher, GanjNameh, Ghare AliSadr, Borje Ghorban etc. We’re going to go to the Mellat Park on 13th and we will return to Tehran on 14th of Farvardin.
یه چند تا جای دیگه رو هم اصلاح کردم که تو اون شماره ها نام نبردم